Saturday, September 27, 2008

Comment On My Story

Amazing Wonders
By: Jessie
Tofaute




Colorful lights explode into the night sky. A loud bang filled the stadium as if someone just fired a gun. I looked over at my cousins beaming face. I could tell he was enjoying this as much as I was. An enormous cloud of smoke hovered above the stadium as if a fire had just emerged. These amazing wonders were dancing to the beet of beautiful songs.
Drama, hope, love, joy, faith, and all kinds of emotions. The crowd broke out applauding as the last spark faded away. I turned to my dad and my cousin to tell them that this was amazing and thank my dad for taking me here. Before I could get the words out of my mouth, my dad said, “Wasn’t this amazing?” I just smiled because I knew he read my mind.

4 comments:

Jessica Watts said...

Is this a whole story or a short story?

Hayley said...

Oooooohhhhh!!!!! WHY ARE YOU NOT IN ALP LANGUAGE???? It is awesome!!!

Jessie said...

Jessica it is the whole story. I like writing short stories. Is that okay?

Jessica Watts said...

Yeah! Check my story out! :)